...??? No? Maybe it's just a perceptual difference. I know for me one of the distinct things I notice when it's being applied is the coldness of it. Like it's not cold cold, but it is definitely something I'd describe as cold. It's a notable temperature difference that I wouldn't call 'cool' because 'cool' for me has...less stark feels? It's less apparent and honestly just kind of boring.
Spoiler: i don't think this is technically nsfw but just in case it's cold in the way that getting even room temperature water on you feels cold. just having something wet on you in general has kind of a cold feeling. (in my experience it normally warms up pretty quickly though!)
I can ship it, writer, but neither Cluny nor Sela is dumb enough to just casually hook up with each other without keeping an eye out for the very obvious opportunity for backstabbing, nor would they be likely to consider that a good enough reason to STOP backstabbing each other.
Spoiler: bathroom functions I know many fanficcers do work their own specific personal fetishes into their fic, hell that's half the fun of fic, but when your fetish is scat and you're not marketing the fic as a fetish fic, you probably should keep it down to fewer than five times per chapter. It limits the audience somewhat when your epic adventure halts every five minutes for a character to use the bathroom in unnecessarily graphic detail.
Regarding the same topic, even if the metaphor in question wasn't disgusting, having every single character in the entire story, including ones who've never met each other, immediately jump to the same topic when seeking a metaphor would be weird and annoying and come off as a hivemind situation. Don't these people have anything else they think about?
Female character, could you stop being such a useless twit that your teenage-at-the-very-most son has to save you from a guy literally less than half your size and strength?
This fic would be well-written if it took place over the course of, say, a week or two, instead of roughly one hour
There are exactly two (2) Philippe/Lorraine/Liselotte ot3 fics on AO3 out of 353 and I'm personally offended because in the finale she literally said "well I am married to the two men I love" and I went yasssss and the moment we finished with the finale I went to dig on AO3 because I will die for these two inbred croissants and the only woman on the show who was awesome and did not die. is this show historically accurate? no. were they actually anyway that close and loving and good people in history? no. do I care? also no. give me ot3. (also give me Claudine back but that is not the point right now)
spiderwebs aren't just another form of dust. they are made by animals. animals have to eat. therefore, a sealed concrete bunker containing only machine parts and abandoned tech won't be filled with spiderwebs. actually, as far underground as you put it, ficcer, it probably won't be very dusty either. dust has to come from somewhere. the ceiling of your bunker is concrete and metal beams. it's not dissolving, guy. where is the dust coming from? where did you get all the spiders? what are they eating??? hey check out this deep and ancient cave, untouched by man for an aeon look how full of dust and spiders it is! what's that, you don't see any dust or spiders? THAT'S BECAUSE THE CEILING IS SOLID AND THERE'S NOTHING FOR SPIDERS TO EAT, YOU WALNUT
On the one hand, I can understand the impulse to use "it's covered with dust and spiderwebs!" as a shorthand for "it's been abandoned for Untold Centuries" (even though 'covered with dust and spiderwebs' can mean 'got left for a couple days' depending on the location). On the other hand...yeah, you could just as easily lampshade how there aren't any spiderwebs or dust, and how everything looks like someone might walk around the corner at any moment. Frankly, the place looking clean would make an abandoned underground bunker more spooky! (Edited because I accidentally borked the quotes.)
the place had supposedly been abandoned for 25 years. so they described it like idk an abanoned house or something? somewhere bugs and wind can get in. conveniently forgetting they'd just said it was under a mountain or something. i personally like the mental image of hydra goons shoveling spiders and dust into the bunker before closing it up and leaving. for flavor!
To be fair, it wasn't always untouched by man. It's man made and people did work and presumably live in there for months of not years before it was abandoned, and I highly doubt they stopped on their way out to vacuum and wipe down, so dust I can buy. Any arachnid hitchikers would be long dead by this point though.
yeah, i'd definitely buy some cobwebs in the shelving and enough dust to make somebody sneeze when they first open the door. maybe having to wipe off the top of a crate to see the label. but this was described as so thick with cobwebs that they had to sweep them aside with a stick just to walk through. which is something you're only going to see in like... a nice grotty abandoned house that's swarming with flies and mosquitoes. not a bone-dry storage room that's never contained anything edible by even bacteria except maybe a couple cardboard boxes. it was just... really really excessive webbage, is what broke my brain. as if they thought spiderwebs just sort of. accrue. over time. inorganically.
i came up with those for a dnd game once. they were completely harmless to organic lifeforms, but a huge pest anyway because they'd eat your equipment. :D
